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Writing in first person

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Why write in first person?
1. I think the strongest reason to choose first person is if your character has a strong voice and a unique world view.
2. It's easier to explain what a character is thinking and why they act the way they do.
3. It gives a feeling of immediacy.
4. If the book is mostly about a character's emotional journey.
5. I've heard that many YA editors prefer books to be in first person. [Do you think that's true?]

Why not write in first person?
1. You can fall into cliches. Think of all the first person detective novels about hard-boiled private eyes.
2. If your book is plot-driven, as opposed to character-driven, it might be harder to pull off.
3. If something happens to the main character that is very traumatic, first person might be too close.

Feel free to add in your own reasons.

This summer, at the request of different editors, I rewrote one book from first to third and one book from third to first. I had a middle grade book in first person, but the voice wasn't unique enough. In third person, it simply worked better. The second book was a YA thriller. My editor for that book thought it would work better if it were in first person, helping readers understand the main characters actions.

Both were absolutely right.

Here's a bit of Harley Jane Kozack's Dating Dead Men, showing some of the pros and cons of writing in first person:
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It was a cigarette burn.

I could scarcely have been more shocked if I'd discovered it on my own flesh, appearing out of nowhere, like stigmata. But it wasn't on me. It was on my grass green carpet, Aisle 3, Condolences/Get Well Soon, where I knelt, rooted in horror.

"Dear God," I said. "Dear God. Dear God."

"Girl, get a grip," Fredreeq called out, barging through the front door of my shop, Wollie's Welcome! Greetings. "I can hear those 'Dear Gods' all the way out to the parking lot. Did someone die? Is it Mr Bundt? Please tell me Mr Bundt died and I can take the day off and go to the beach."

"He's not dead. He's due here any minute. I was doing the final Dustbusting, and look, look — " I waved at the carpet. "At the last inspection, Mr Bundt questioned the decor. I told him it was French Provincial. I can't pass this off as French Provincial."

"No." Fredreeq loomed over me. "Cigarette burns are strictly Trailer Park. White Trash [not a bad way of saying Wollie is white], no offense." She leaned down, sending a wave of Shalimar my way. "That's one hell of a burn. That is the mother of all cigarette burns. That's a cigar burn."

I looked up at my friend and employee, took in her attire, and said it again. "Dear God."

Earrings the size of teacups dangled from delicate earlobes. Zebra- print stockings stretched from the hem of a very short, very tight skirt to a pair of velvet stiletto heels.

"Yeah, I know, I'm pushing the envelope here." Fredreeq straightened up and moved to the cash register counter. "Is it the stockings? You think bare legs are better?"

It was a tough call. I wasn't wearing panty hose myself, but I had on a long calico skirt and socks and red high-tops. Also a red sweater with a dalmatian applique. It had seemed like a good outfit an hour earlier, but now I wasn't so sure. I'm over five foot eleven. [This description is a little strained in first person.] Next to Fredreeq, I could look like a piece of playground equipment. [I think this comment works well in first person - gives you a sense of her sense of humor.]

"Maybe," I said, and turned to scratch at the cigarette burn with my fingernail. "You're black, [this is kind of As you know, Bob] which I always think makes the high heels-no stockings look — "
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[info]jonstephens wrote:
Oct. 16th, 2006 05:24 pm (UTC)
1st person lets you have a flawed narrator. When you're in 3rd person, your narrator isn't really supposed to have a flawed point of view or irrational beliefs.
[info]aprilhenry wrote:
Oct. 16th, 2006 05:27 pm (UTC)
Yes - very good. The narrator who lies to you or is undependable is tricky to pull off, but great when it works.
[info]melissa_writing wrote:
Oct. 16th, 2006 06:08 pm (UTC)
RE: "I've heard that many YA editors prefer books to be in first person. [Do you think that's true?]"

My editors and agent were each appalled when I told them that another agent had suggested I re-write in first person. They love that it's in 3rd limited (with three narrative voices). One suggested that first "would ruin" the text. I'm totally relieved by this because writing in first feels so much harder to me. I get that people say it's easier, but unless I'm writing horror I find 1st very difficult.

I don't know about other editors, but I'm going to suggest that it varies (what doesn't, though?). While 1st is great for some texts, it's not fit for others.
[info]aprilhenry wrote:
Oct. 16th, 2006 06:43 pm (UTC)
Yes, if you have more than one viewpoint character, I think you almost always have to write in third person.
[info]melissa_writing wrote:
Oct. 16th, 2006 06:48 pm (UTC)
de Lint did a great job with multiple first pov in The Blue Girl, but it was still tricky reading it in a few spots. Lovely text though . . .

Maybe it's the multi-pov that trips me b/c I can't seem to get my head around the idea of writing a story with only one pov--except for my horror short stories where I've done 1 pov in 1st. For a novel though, it's the multiplicity of voices that makes me want to write the tale.
[info]lisayee wrote:
Oct. 16th, 2006 08:02 pm (UTC)
I love writing in first person because that way I can sort-of-channel my character. Then, if it doesn't work, I can blame it on them.
[info]aprilhenry wrote:
Oct. 16th, 2006 08:29 pm (UTC)
Ah, the old "blame the messenger" trick!
[info]rhea123 wrote:
Oct. 16th, 2006 09:04 pm (UTC)
i write but i suck but i like first person better.i like to think up the personality for the character and what they would say or think...its fun.
[info]aprilhenry wrote:
Oct. 16th, 2006 09:11 pm (UTC)
Every single writer who is published today sucked when they started out. Maybe parts were good, but a lot more needed to be improved. The only way you get better is to write. You can always edit crappy stuff. You can't edit nothing....
[info]rhea123 wrote:
Oct. 17th, 2006 09:26 pm (UTC)
true.all i want to do is write (my mom always freaks out when i tell her this so i try not to.lol)and i am getting better..but i'm still not good enough.lol.were you any good when you started?
[info]aprilhenry wrote:
Oct. 17th, 2006 09:34 pm (UTC)
A few things were good. And I liked to do it. That is more than enough to build on, no matter what it is you like to do.

In some ways, you have an advantage being young. Because if you do finish a book and look for an agent and then a publisher, the fact that you are young can be a selling point. There are several people on LJ who have sold their first books and are barely out of college.

Signed
Old enough to be the parent of someone barely out of college.
[info]rhea123 wrote:
Oct. 17th, 2006 09:42 pm (UTC)
lol.selling point...hmmm...i would rather have the book(story..blah,blah...we.)be the the selling point.if that makes sense.lol.uhh if you are old enough to be the parent of someone barely out of college then you're not old(ex.GG,ha!gotcha...so just i guess you can always say that.lol.i'm not making any sense today.but i know what i'm trying to say and its not bad so lol).sooo what are agents and publishers like? (such a stupid question...well, i am young.lol)
[info]aprilhenry wrote:
Oct. 18th, 2006 01:53 am (UTC)
Yes, you are absolutely right. The book is the important thing. I know a of adults who kind of forget that. They think that marketing the book is more important than writing it.
(Anonymous) wrote:
Oct. 18th, 2006 02:05 am (UTC)
i can't believe that actually made sense to you...but yeah,writing is the important thing.besides if it were all about marketing then that would be sooo bad!i mean some people get inspired by books.some books save people's lives (trust me)and some books just help people deal.if it were all about marketing rather than the story this world wouldn't be the same (understatement)
[info]rhea123 wrote:
Oct. 18th, 2006 02:07 am (UTC)
that was me.lol.forgot to log in!
(Anonymous) wrote:
Feb. 16th, 2009 02:37 am (UTC)
First or Third?
I have been struggling with this lately ... and remembering that when I was in grade 5 I am sure I had a much better handle on it. So, I think it is more difficult to intellectualise it. I may have had a helpful semi-epiphany: is it better for the story to 'be' the main character or write about the main character/s? Or, does it work better if you write on behalf of the characters, or if you pretend that you (the writer) don't exist? I am going with this approach for the moment ... great topic for posts!
[info]aprilhenry wrote:
Feb. 16th, 2009 03:02 am (UTC)
Re: First or Third?
That's an interesting way of looking at it. If you write for young adults, it seems like editors really prefer it to be in first person.
(Anonymous) wrote:
Nov. 12th, 2009 07:48 am (UTC)
Hey, this post just reminded me of something really important. ITS TIME TO WRITE!
[info]aprilhenry wrote:
Nov. 12th, 2009 02:58 pm (UTC)
Wow, you really went back in the time machine!
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