aprilhenry (aprilhenry) wrote,
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Remove the filter!

Janet Burroway's Writing Fiction has some wonderful advice for writers.

One piece of advice is to "remove the filter." Here are two examples, filtered and not:
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Mrs. Blair made her way to the chair by the window and sank gratefully into it. She looked out the window and there, across the street, she saw the ivory BMW parked in front of the fire plug once more. It seemed to her, though, that something was wrong with it. She noticed that it was listing slightly toward the back and side, the back rim resting on the asphalt.

Compare to:

Mrs. Blair made her way to the chair by the window and sank gratefully into it. Across the street the ivory BMW was parked in front of the fire plug again. Something was wrong with it, though. It was listing slightly toward the back and side, the back rim resting on the asphalt.
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This is something I do a lot - and now am trying to do less of.



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